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Thứ Sáu, 23 tháng 10, 2009

TOPIC 1:

BOOKS




In childhood, whenever I got excellent achievement my mother gave me an interesting book. I was unpleasant, and told “I like sweet, biscuit, ice-cream, not book. Why you give me book”. My mother said to me with caressing manners “Your teeth can be decayed by sweet, biscuit, and ice-cream. They’re harmful for your health, if you eat them too much. On the contrary, the more you read book, the broader you open your mind. Books open a new world for you.” At that time I didn’t understand my mother’s words. Day by day, year by year, I feel I’m more mature after reading books. So I believe my mother’s right. To me, books are an important part of our life.
First, books provide diversified and necessary knowledge for human to improve better. We usually advance our grasp by books. The more we learn, the more difficult books are. For example: in secondary school we have more subject than in primary school. It means we have more books to learn and read, and the content of textbooks has higher level than in primary school. Besides, we can travel all over the world to explore the cream of custom, or culture, or life style, or traditional festival of any country we want by books. Through the pages of the books we can go to new lands, meet stranger people, and see the beauty of uncanny pyramid, and luxury building, and ancient castle. We can find out any field we’re interested in such as: history, religion, literature, art, music, mathematics, politics, architecture, etc. by books. With books our feet don’t move but our mind extend. Book is a bridge which connects past with present, and future.
Second, books make us active, and bring to us the best thing in life. Books make us brainstorm. When we read a detective book we’re so curious so we think a lot of thing about it and its involving event. Books encourage our creation, and imagining. For example: when we read a book about the life of wild animals, we imagine about the picture of animals’ living environment, and habits, food, etc. Books help us appreciate the real value of life. It’s respectability, tolerance, sympathy, help. They give me good advice when we lose way, or face to trouble. Book is willing to share everything with you as a good friend. Moreover, when we read books, we meet a lot of question, reading books seems to be the shortest way to get the answer. Books bring more happiness, joy, and belief, hopeness to our live than we imagine.
Books are helpful, so to read a right thing is very necessary in our own life. Having good books is having good company to try it ourselves to over come problem to get success, and happiness.

3 nhận xét:

  1. - the thisis statement is very clear and specific.
    - the topic sentence in each paragraph is good.
    - but in the concluding paragraph seems not to relate much with the essay.

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  2. *paragraph level:
    grammar:A,vocabulary:A,development:A, ideas:A,unity:A.
    *essay paragraph:
    + introductory paragraph:
    thesis statement:A, ways of developing: A+
    + development:A
    + connection:A

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  3. paragraph level
    Grammar: A
    Vocabulary:A
    Development:A
    Ideas:A
    Unity, coherence:A
    Essay level
    Introductory paragraph:A
    -Thesis statement: A
    -Ways of developing:A+
    Development:A
    Connection among the paragraphs: A

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